Writing a pitch 🤓
Once you’ve amassed a good amount of research, you may feel like it’s time to start building. Not so fast. Your next step is going to be to write a pitch using the language that you mined in the research phase.
The format that I use to create pitches, which was, again, created by Amy Hoy and Alex Hillman, looks something like this:
- evoke the pain(s)
- imagine the dream
- introduce the fix
While writing your pitch, you’ll want to actively demonstrate your understanding of your reader/customer. One of the easiest ways to do this is by making a point of using the pronoun “you.” This can feel awkward at first, but it’s important to make a habit of it. If you follow the pain-dream-fix format, but fail to use “you” language throughout, you’re unlikely to write something all that convincing. Writing a pitch is an exercise in empathy. Focus on who you’re writing for and imagine you’re speaking directly to them.
Begin your pitch by evoking the pain(s) that you uncovered in the research phase. In a bullet pointed list, demonstrate your understanding of these pains by using your customer’s language to describe it. Copy and paste key words and phrases from your research into your list to make it more convincing. The more visceral, evocative and concrete your customer’s language, the better it is to be included in your pitch. Three to five bullet points is best.
Next, tell us how your customer’s quality of life would be improved if those pains were relieved. Beginning with the clause “what if,” describe this future in a bullet pointed list. This is the dream section, and it functions by demonstrating to your customer the benefits of your product before you’ve even introduced it.
Finally, introduce your product (known as “the fix”). Describe what it does and how it does it. Speak, once again, to the pains uncovered in the first section. Finish off by giving us a place to leave our email address and an idea of what we should expect from you in the coming months. Consider squashing any residual doubts in a frequently asked questions section underneath.
The structure of this type of pitch is formulaic, but it works. Don’t feel pressure to imitate it exactly, as robotic copywriting runs the risk of sounding like a late night fitness infomercial. Hide the seams of the pitch in healthy, well written paragraphs. The more conversational your writing, the better it’ll sound.
Case Study: Writing Extra’s Pitch
Scrolling through my page of notes for Extra’s pitch.
I’m not embarrassed to say that writing the pitch for Extra took several weeks. My research uncovered almost two dozen pain points from around 60 different discussion threads. My “dream” material consisted of about ten bullet points but kept changing because I couldn’t quite make up my mind about which pains were the most valuable (I went back to the message boards a few times before I finally settled).
I also struggled with the desire to editorialize on customer pain. People can sound crude on message boards and it’s easy to find yourself editing out the most evocative parts of their language. But that would be a mistake. How the customer expresses themselves is just as important as what they express themselves about. Look no further than the rhetoric of Donald Trump to understand how crude language often trumps (har!) semantic language when we’re trying to persuade.
“How Donald Trump Answers A Question” by NerdWriter.
After five different versions, I finally settled on what you see on extra.ai. There’s still work to do. My pitch doesn’t adequately “hide the seams” of the format and it’s a little long. But it captures my target customers’ pain well.
Show your work 💎
Now it’s time to get your pitch in front of your customer. Go back to the message boards that you mined for research and introduce yourself. Introduce the product and the pitch and ask for feedback. Incorporate that feedback.
If everything checks out, and the reception is positive, you’re finally ready to start building. Start small. If you’ve done the research, coming up with an MVP shouldn’t be all that difficult. Focus on solving the most important pains first and let the rest follow.
You can further validate your idea by taking pre-orders and by doing one-on-one interviews with subscribers as they trickle in. Resist the urge to show your pitch to your friends if they’re not also your target customer. It’s easy to muddy the water with good intentions.
Build a feedback loop with your new found community of customers by being as transparent as you can throughout the build process: show off your design work, discuss how you’re funding the project, and make product discussions publicly available. Transparency builds trust and generates buy-in. It’ll pay off when you’re finally ready to kick things live.
Case Study: Keeping Extra’s Audience Engaged
Our medium term strategy for Extra is to focus on small to medium sized startups. To that end, we’ve circulated Extra as far and as wide as we’ve been able to within our networks.
We’ve collected a lot of feedback from on one-on-one interviews with founders. Some are managing social media incredibly well. Others are searching for ways to make it work. These interviews have provided us with some pretty incredible insight into the mindset of our customer. We’ve realized, for example, that despite there being a glut of material on social media marketing, no body really knows what the hell they’re doing.
Our first full-length publicly available product discussion: pricing our new SaaS. Subscribe up for more here.
We’ve also been making our product discussions publicly available on YouTube. Good transparency content is catnip for SaaS founders. Reception has been a little underwhelming so far, but we think we’re on the right track. Behemoth posts like this one (and the one you’re reading) have brought in a good amount of sign ups. We know that we’ve hit a vein because people keep offering us money.